Too Many Words, Not Enough Story

THE BURNING OF NIGHT by Louis Lalande is full of descriptive words, no doubt meant to create a dramatic tone for the story. Instead, the author succeeds only in suffocating any trace of suspense. Take away the abundance of adjectives, and there really isn't much left to the story.

Practically nothing is revealed about the main character, even less about the entity he discovers. In other words, there doesn't appear to be a point to this piece of fiction. A better ending would have had the parents waking up to a house fire seemingly caused by their son smoking bed, with readers knowing the "true" story.

As always,
AstraDaemon