Extreme BS

INSIDE by David Pope advertises itself as an extreme horror story:

"If you don't like extreme horror then perhaps read something else."

However, the story comes across as an excuse for an explicit sex scene...not even a good one. Pope should have begun the story from the beginning of the pregnancy, written the witchdoctor scene as a flashback, and then finished as is.

The ending is pretty damn great, but the delivery of the story is a wreck.

As always,
AstraDaemon

Jungle Fever

VIRUS by David Pope is a short story about a jungle expedition which falls apart before they can begin anything. The writing style is a little sloppy, which disrupts the pace of the narration. There are more than a few sexual descriptions, but not good enough to be considered erotic or relevant. The author spends more time describing the characters than offering any action or dialogue. The sequence of events is interesting, but, again, written on the sloppy side.

Seems more like the rough draft of an idea for an apocalypse story. The author should consider doing a revision, preferably with an editor. First impressions are important, even for short stories.

As always,
AstraDaemon