Get Serious, Please

Short fiction story about Katelyn, a college student, who is kidnapped by a serial killer from a bar in Portland, Oregon.

Katelyn Caged by Liz Livingston is a flash fiction mess...pieces thrown haphazardly together. The dialogue is basic, the characters flat and the POV switches are quite sloppy. Don't even get me started on the ridiculous time jump.

If Livingston wants to be taken seriously as a writer, she needs to get an editor to help transform this into something resembling an actual story.

As always,
AstraDaemon

My Eyes Hurt

Backwood Babies by R.P. Healy makes me think the author probably strokes quite a few out to movies like Wrong Turn, not because of Eliza Dushku, but because the inbred mutants get Healy all hot and bothered...or maybe a movie like I Spit On Your Grave. I have read all kinds of trash, but this has some seriously limited vocabulary describing some very basic torture fantasy. Even if I didn't find the entire story offensive, the writing is simply atrocious. No plot at all.

As always,
AstraDaemon